Sunday, April 10, 2016

Waking in darkness


Waking in darkness
Listening to you breathing
Waiting for the dawn

You're not there of course
Birds tap against the window
As the new day comes

Sleeping or awake
I can't get it in my skull
That you've really gone

Sun unfolds the day
I make myself a coffee
And some burnt white toast

Skein of geese flying
Might take a love note to you
That's probable

Brick by brick I try
To find a life once again
Seems impossible

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24 comments:

  1. Oh this is probably one of your best.What a lovely lovely poem.

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  2. I think this is the favourite of your poems today - it reads from the heart and like all good writing it is the pauses in between the poignant details which convey such depth of feeling

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  3. "Brick by brick I try / To find a life once again" there's much strength here and acceptance....

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  4. Oh this is so beautifully poignant..!!

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  5. 'Skein of geese' is such a beautiful phrase to me. How poignant to think of it being a message of love from one to another.

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  6. I can sense the extreme longing you have here, Robin. Poetically expressed.

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  7. I feel the longing and the sadness here! Sometimes facing a new day is hard.

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  8. So bleak the world might seem when left alone. There is a hope in the skein of geese, and I love how it's set against the throbs of pain.

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  9. Very touching poem you can feel the emotion in your words.

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  10. Oh yes that time when we begin our life after a loss...each day going through the motions and clinging still to hope...beautifully expressed Robin!

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  11. I so feel this poem, my friend. I wrote in a similar vein yesterday, and there were birds in it too, so I recognize the feelings in these lines. A beautiful write, kiddo. I love the geese taking a message.

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  12. wow...this is so touching. Loved it :)

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  13. Losing someone that was part of our life and routine makes everything feel so alien, takes the light out of things that once we thought would forever shine... I really love flash of possibility we glimpse in the penultimate stanza. It makes the "impossibility" of the last stanza more bearable.

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  14. "That you've really gone" is perhaps the hardest truth to ever get through our skulls :-( Can really feel the emotion in this one!

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  15. It is like a phantom limb...when we lose someone that is that close to us. This is beautiful Robin!

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  16. This is beautiful, tender, sad. It truly touched my heart.

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  17. Every line is tinged with sorrow and sadness. so heart rending. Visit Keith's Ramblings

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  18. Sad, but can feel the intent and fullfillment. It's beautiful in its way.

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  19. Life can take for the better forthwith. May perhaps be a blessing.

    Hank

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  20. The gone-ness of one whom we once loved is the most devastating of all human experiences.

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  21. Love the notion of 'Skein of geese flying
    Might take a love note to you
    That's probable' ~ the intention may takes us wherever we desire... ~ tender poem

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