I recall her still
The velvet touch of her skin
She had such beauty
Her silvery words
Echoing in my poor heart
Voice clear as a bell
But what of her lips
A sweet bowl full of cherries
Ready to be kissed
She was so much fun
Oft curled safely on my lap
I was in heaven
What beauty she had
In a class all by herself
But it could not last
That her eyes were green
Warned me that she was jealous
But I was a fool
For those few months
She was the light of my life
Until she dropped me
"I'm busy tonight"
Those oily words of her deceit
Our romance over
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Ouch! Brutal. But it sounds as if you were well rid of her; it was going to happen. Just a matter of time.
ReplyDeleteOh - that end must hurt... I remember more the "let's just be friends"...
ReplyDeleteoily words of deceit..think everyone's heard a few of those...but then there were the good times!!
ReplyDeleteYou have had a lot of girlfriends.Now they would just text you or email you and tell you to bugger off.
ReplyDeleteOuch! It does hurt a lot, and I can well relate to this feeling. Beautifully penned.
ReplyDeleteOh dear, what a shame. Next!
ReplyDeleteMy Sunday Whirl!
Oh the sadness of hearing those words, "I'm busy...." I bet most people have experienced this at some point in their life. Sigh.
ReplyDeleteIt is in the process of growing up and of being hurt! One gets out of it wiser!
ReplyDeleteHank
What a crushing end!
ReplyDeleteI'm too busy, sounds like what was said to me once "I'll talk to you when I can" ouch the pain still lingers.
ReplyDeleteA part of u will always remember that blissful period sans the ending..
ReplyDeleteThe fall from heaven.........so painful. And to be dismissed without concern for your feelings. Not very nice at all.
ReplyDeleteBusted bubble, it is painful and we learn through it, become stronger for it, wiser in our choices and attachments. Good write.
ReplyDeleteAlthough there is a serious to this one - I cannot help but hear a bit of giggle below the surface... "those oily words" ... Perhaps it is the relief I am hearing in the story of a green-eyed monster vanquished in time for a Halloween writing...
ReplyDeleteYou capture well the pain of rejection. Sad, but so nicely written here.
ReplyDeleteThe deceit is a dreadful surprise, makes for a dramatic ending though
ReplyDeletemuch love...
What a perfect description: oily words. Indeed!
ReplyDeleteYou write such intriguing poem/stories. Wonderful words.
ReplyDeletePerhaps we all have one of those in our memory?
DeleteElizabeth
Ouch is all I can say Robin. But in life, not all has a happy ending.
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much love...
Loved it - but while thinking in terms of personal challenge as has prompted my second bite at this same cherry, can you add another from her POV?
ReplyDeleteI haven't asked her but "colourless and boring" or "no fun at all" come to mind!
DeleteAh well, they don't all have happy endings, do they?
DeleteSad.. and all-too-familiar. Well-written!
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