Saturday, October 29, 2016

I recall her still


I recall her still
The velvet touch of her skin
She had such beauty

Her silvery words
Echoing in my poor heart
Voice clear as a bell

But what of her lips
A sweet bowl full of cherries
Ready to be kissed

She was so much fun
Oft curled safely on my lap
I was in heaven

What beauty she had
In a class all by herself
But it could not last

That her eyes were green
Warned me that she was jealous
But I was a fool

For those few months
She was the light of my life
Until she dropped me

"I'm busy tonight"
Those oily words of her deceit
Our romance over

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25 comments:

  1. Ouch! Brutal. But it sounds as if you were well rid of her; it was going to happen. Just a matter of time.

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  2. Oh - that end must hurt... I remember more the "let's just be friends"...

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  3. oily words of deceit..think everyone's heard a few of those...but then there were the good times!!

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  4. You have had a lot of girlfriends.Now they would just text you or email you and tell you to bugger off.

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  5. Ouch! It does hurt a lot, and I can well relate to this feeling. Beautifully penned.

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  6. Oh the sadness of hearing those words, "I'm busy...." I bet most people have experienced this at some point in their life. Sigh.

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  7. It is in the process of growing up and of being hurt! One gets out of it wiser!

    Hank

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  8. I'm too busy, sounds like what was said to me once "I'll talk to you when I can" ouch the pain still lingers.

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  9. A part of u will always remember that blissful period sans the ending..

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  10. The fall from heaven.........so painful. And to be dismissed without concern for your feelings. Not very nice at all.

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  11. Busted bubble, it is painful and we learn through it, become stronger for it, wiser in our choices and attachments. Good write.

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  12. Although there is a serious to this one - I cannot help but hear a bit of giggle below the surface... "those oily words" ... Perhaps it is the relief I am hearing in the story of a green-eyed monster vanquished in time for a Halloween writing...

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  13. You capture well the pain of rejection. Sad, but so nicely written here.

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  14. The deceit is a dreadful surprise, makes for a dramatic ending though

    much love...

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  15. What a perfect description: oily words. Indeed!

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  16. You write such intriguing poem/stories. Wonderful words.

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    1. Perhaps we all have one of those in our memory?

      Elizabeth

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  17. Ouch is all I can say Robin. But in life, not all has a happy ending.

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    Happy Halloween

    much love...

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  19. Loved it - but while thinking in terms of personal challenge as has prompted my second bite at this same cherry, can you add another from her POV?

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    1. I haven't asked her but "colourless and boring" or "no fun at all" come to mind!

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    2. Ah well, they don't all have happy endings, do they?

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  20. Sad.. and all-too-familiar. Well-written!

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