City lights now fading
The overnight bus pulls away
I sat at the back
Crawl through the suburbs
Faster on the open road
My heart beat slower
Pretending to sleep
Leaning against the window
Dark trees whistling by
The flashing headlights
Slowly disappearing now
Heading out of state
Worries now fading
Insulating myself now
From being followed
I could kick myself
For parking my butt with her
Her man flipped his lid!
Was he in a spin
Exploding like St. Helens
Mimicking the man
Lava then oozing
From the guy's crater rim mouth
Lucky I escaped
Bus crossed the state line
First small town is my limit
I promised myself
I must grow a beard
Then I'll get myself a job
Go easy with girls
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Excellent description of the bus ride....your persona made me laugh. The idea of you" parking your butt" just does not ring true.(Still laughing)
ReplyDeleteYou made this bus ride come alive. I find myself wanting to know why he decided to leave and just where he was destined to go!
ReplyDeletecool, oldegg, go easy on girls...
ReplyDeleteNight time bus ride do have a magic - you're sort of coconut from whatever is chasing you - until you get off of course (so to speak;)
ReplyDeleteGreat story. Glad you got out safely!
ReplyDeleteThe great escape! I went on the overnight coach to Scotland last month - just thought I'd mention it!
ReplyDeleteRosey stays overnight!
Uh oh. Crossed the line, eh?
ReplyDeleteNice change for you.
Randy
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ReplyDeleteI'd like a man with a beard as long as he has a job!
ReplyDeleteMy SS2 - I stayed at Keith's overnight!
great escape. may i suggest... job before beard?
ReplyDeleteThere is something exciting and mysterious about a night time long distance bus ride - the perfect vehicle on which to pin a little mystery. A cool piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteSuspense! I know this persona is not you ... but I want to hear the rest of the story. As is, it also works as flash fiction.
ReplyDeleteHaving ridden buses both in daylight and dark, you capture the feeling of the ride very well,
DeleteElizabeth
Ha, this is a story I imagine has happened a time or two...though not to you. You got the voice exactly right.
ReplyDeleteha, I would like to hear this traveler's story, it reminded me of perhaps a tour bus for a band. You know some of those guys get into trouble on the road.
ReplyDeletecool narrative Old Egg
ReplyDeleteA lot can happen on a bus trip. Lesson learnt and one is more prepared now! Good humor Robin!
ReplyDeleteHank
Oh the great escape!!
ReplyDeleteYup! I agree with your conclusion.
ReplyDeleteZQ
The suspense was killing me! I hope he gets the beard... and the job. ;-)
ReplyDeleteDelightful narrative, Robin 💖 You made the entire scene come alive!
ReplyDeleteProbably a good idea... I can see a shotgun wedding next time.
ReplyDeleteThe bus ride ends on a promising note. I hope the rider gets what he dreams of!
ReplyDeleteVividly created! I love your stories in verse.
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