Sunday, 5 June 2016

The girl on the train


She has hazel eyes
One glance from them I felt limp
We spoke not a word

 Each morning the same
On the train we took to work
Went on for months

 Then I sat by her
Only seat left in carriage
A small glance from her

 My heart then softens
So I dare to speak to her
Just to hear her voice

 Oh how sweet it is
Getting her to talk in this way
I could kiss her cheek

 She talks about work
About her family home
I could hold her tight

 I check her fingers
A small scar but there's no ring
Good she's not engaged

 But her eyes notice
Then pouts, "You checking me out?"
I love her spirit

 Her name is Anna
We're always together now
We sit side by side

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21 comments:

  1. Anonymous5 June 2016 at 01:08

    Guess you were checking her out..but it worked out pretty well!!!

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  2. Jae Rose5 June 2016 at 01:27

    Made me think of some film or TV show or another where you build someone up and then the perception of them changes as soon as they speak - i am glad in this case there was a happy ending

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  3. Sumana Roy5 June 2016 at 01:39

    love this narrative ending in happiness :)

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  4. brudberg5 June 2016 at 03:28

    Ha.. yes I have heard cases like this... that daily commute could be exactly that opportunity to meet.. and just maybe each check the other out a long time before one dares to take the first step.

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  5. Susan5 June 2016 at 03:57

    Cool!

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  6. Mary5 June 2016 at 05:07

    Sometimes it seems to be fate the way things work out in such a beautiful way!!

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  7. Rosemary Nissen-Wade5 June 2016 at 05:37

    Another sweet story!

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  8. Sanaa Rizvi5 June 2016 at 06:10

    Beautifully romantic :D

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  9. Magaly Guerrero5 June 2016 at 07:06

    I can't stop grinning. Love the way they meet, so naturally and intense at the same time. I love that his want and admiration of her runs so deed that it's nearly scary. But then it isn't. Because it's obvious that they both wanted the same thing. And get, too. And that is just glorious. ♥

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  10. Aditi5 June 2016 at 07:28

    Awww...that was so cute and romantic! :)

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  11. Donna@LivingFromHappiness5 June 2016 at 09:17

    I love how you eased into this noticing...thinking, contemplating and finally the opportunity...she apparently didn't mind you were checking her out! Another wonderful poem of love!

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  12. Keiths Ramblings5 June 2016 at 09:50

    ...and you didn't even use a chat-up line! Nice one.

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  13. Sherry Blue Sky5 June 2016 at 10:28

    I love happy endings! Smiles.

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  14. Wendy Bourke5 June 2016 at 10:38

    Wonderful! The stuff of dreams: delightfully "captured".

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  15. annell45 June 2016 at 12:02

    Yes, "side by side"...happily ever after...maybe.

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  16. Matthew Henningsen5 June 2016 at 13:48

    A nice story, full of love and hope. Enjoyed reading this.

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  17. Optimistic Existentialist6 June 2016 at 01:10

    This is AMAZING!! I read an article recently that lots of people meet on trains or buses and fall in love :) makes me smile.

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  18. kaykuala6 June 2016 at 01:46

    We're always together now
    We sit side by side

    Great ending Robin! Together now as friends or together now as husband and wife. Hank reads it both ways. When a poem presents dual possibilities it reveals one of special thoughts and of quality!

    Hank

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  19. Luk Lei6 June 2016 at 19:08

    blossoming love, at least acceptance. beautifully expressed :)

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  20. Deepa8 June 2016 at 00:08

    That is such a beautiful poem
    heartwarming

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  21. Sheilagh Lee8 June 2016 at 14:59

    aw blooming love This is beautiful

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