Wednesday, 29 July 2015

I have to be me




Silent she looked down
Checking her red fingernails
At his proposal

 He was not handsome
Nor did he have a good job
He was just eager

 Her nails were no help
He smiled hopefully at her
Waiting for acceptance

 Was this her escape
From her cruel family home
For better or worse

 At her suggestion
She should meet his mum and dad
He shook his head hard

 This was no marriage
That was made in the heavens 
Just jailbirds fleeing

 She made up her mind
Said let me think about it
Then left home next day

 Better to be free
She mused on the long coach trip
I have to be me
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19 comments:

  1. X29 July 2015 at 04:27

    Eh probably for the better because I can't imagine that marriage lasting. Especially if it is a consolation prize. And if you can not be yourself.

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  2. Sanaa Rizvi29 July 2015 at 04:30

    I thought this was quite brilliant specially the third stanza where she is looking at her red nails.. hoping to get out of the situation. Excellent write :D

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  3. Sumana Roy29 July 2015 at 05:34

    "I have to be me" this sometimes leads one to a better way and some to worse...

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  4. Jae Rose29 July 2015 at 06:10

    Question is does running let allow someone to be free and themselves...sometimes miles alone do not fix what stops us being what and who we are..

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  5. Purba chakraborty29 July 2015 at 09:19

    I liked the way you have sketched the character of the lady in this poem. A brilliant piece, indeed :)

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  6. Linda Kay29 July 2015 at 09:33

    Probably a very wise decision on her part. Marriage might have been a real disaster!

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  7. Sherry Blue Sky29 July 2015 at 09:51

    Well, this is an interesting response to the prompt. I especially liked her seeking an answer in her nails......then taking off on the bus. Likely a good move!

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  8. Gillena Cox29 July 2015 at 11:29

    She choose freedom. Not a bad decision in the setting 'fleeing prison'

    Have a good Wednesday

    Much love...

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  9. Mary29 July 2015 at 11:58

    Yikes - some escapes are only temporary, and then they turn into heck!

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  10. claireylove29 July 2015 at 13:22

    I see the escape at the end as the beginning of her escape, not the end. She is just beginning to learn the value of 'being me'. Great story!

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  11. Unknown29 July 2015 at 14:59

    you do have to find yourself before you can find happiness another. Great lesson Robin!

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  12. Torie29 July 2015 at 15:25

    'I have to be me'. I think that's one of the only things that truly can set you free. Takes some time to learn that lesson though :)

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  13. rallentanda30 July 2015 at 04:05

    It would be nice if most could be someone else (nicer:)

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  14. Gen Giggles 30 July 2015 at 05:39

    That is one way to leave, better than a bad marriage.

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  15. Myrna R.30 July 2015 at 07:39

    Good luck to her. I hope she hasn't internalized prisons in her mind. You something sad, that is unfortunately true for many. Good story!

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  16. Grace30 July 2015 at 16:01

    Yes, best to be free of him and family that is crushing her ~ Hope it works out for her ~

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  17. Anonymous30 July 2015 at 20:19

    "He was just eager

    Her nails were no help"

    I love this pairing of lines, the way the first flows into the next.

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  18. kaykuala31 July 2015 at 16:53

    Very spectacular twist in the story, oldegg! Great!

    Hank

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  19. Rosemary Nissen-Wade1 August 2015 at 06:21

    Yes, self-acceptance must come first.

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