What did I just
say?
It was a lunatic
thing
I said “I love
you”
My head is
spinning
A spaceship out
of control
“You? Me? Forever?”
Angels spread
their wings
And usually tread
with care
They have been
busy
Our planets
collide
A stunning
supernova
I’ll be the loser
Should I
endeavor
To get out of
this tangle
"No, I do love you"
You've stars in your eyes
Eternity is good for me
You are my sunshine
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You've stars in your eyes
Eternity is good for me
You are my sunshine
Image from www.news.com.au
after all love wins
ReplyDeleteBeautiful! A little bit similar to what I wrote. Perhaps great minds think alike. ;-)
ReplyDeletehttp://poetryofthenetherworld.blogspot.com/2014/12/forever-your-little-loser.html
Love the stars and supernova as the metaphor.. But I think if we never dare we will always be the losers.
ReplyDeleteHeaven sent love is the bestest love...hold onto it and soar to the clouds :)
ReplyDeleteEternity is good for us all--and it was good for me to read this delightful tribute to the collisions caused by love!
ReplyDeleteA Tiny Whirlwind
That trepidation of saying I love you the first time...putting it all out there wondering will it come crashing down...love the planets colliding as that is how it feels isn't it!
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ReplyDeletei am not sure but i had the picture of annie lenox singing "no more i love yous" in the first stanza. :-)
ReplyDeletelove conquers all - be it on earth or on heaven's above
PS
deleted my previous reply as i missed the word "sure"
Love is persistent, isn't it? And sometimes we just have to follow where the angels lead!! Smiles.
ReplyDeleteVery sweet and romantic poem, smiles ~
ReplyDeleteFor an old egg you still have the "spark" :-)
ReplyDeleteZQ
The first step is necessarily bold and feels very risky but it is also often rewarding.
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ReplyDeletelove the romance stirred in an inter galactic whirl
ReplyDeleteMine is here:
http://myblog-verses.blogspot.com/2014/12/wordle-191.html
much love
"A stunning supernova".....very cool write! "Our planets collide." So apt.
ReplyDeleteYou did a wonderful job of weaving together the ideas of celestial bodies into clerical ideals and love. I like this because you ended up with a poem that touches base on multiple different concepts. It is very important in poetry to allow the reader to unravel their own idea of what the poem is about, and you left this poem open enough to allow that.
ReplyDeletePersonally, I thought the poem was about someone appreciating the universe that we live in.
Keep up the good work! :)
P.S.
Don't forget to check out my latest poem at my blog: http://kmercpoetry.blogspot.com/2014/12/twelve-days-of-christmas-1-partridge.html
I feel a song coming on!
DeleteVery sweetly written :)
ReplyDeleteYou made these words dance and I love the photo...
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Well expressed it does feel like that.
ReplyDeleteWe all -supernova stars, and how important to see it every day it in the eyes of our closer ones...good reminders. Thank you, Robin.
ReplyDeleteSometimes love makes you feel that way.
ReplyDeleteThis is fun and light and very well done...excellent.
ReplyDeletehttp://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.ca/2014/12/come-they-close.html
So beautifully romantic.
ReplyDeletea lovely piece!
ReplyDeleteI found your poem to be filled with romance and love in another sphere..spinning out of control..that is often what love does, it makes our world spin. I enjoyed the whole concept of connecting with the universe.
ReplyDeletefelt the uncertainty and the eventual recognition of true love.
ReplyDeletemay this be a lasting love
ReplyDeletenothing ventured nothing gained.
ReplyDeleteLove comes with uncertainty. But the determination makes it worthy...
ReplyDeleteBrilliant :)