Saturday, December 13, 2014

Made in heaven



What did I just say?
It was a lunatic thing
I said “I love you”

My head is spinning
A spaceship out of control
“You? Me? Forever?”

Angels spread their wings
And usually tread with care
They have been busy

Our planets collide
A stunning supernova
I’ll be the loser

Should I endeavor
To get out of this tangle 
"No, I do love you"

You've stars in your eyes
Eternity is good for me
You are my sunshine

Image from www.news.com.au


30 comments:

  1. Beautiful! A little bit similar to what I wrote. Perhaps great minds think alike. ;-)
    http://poetryofthenetherworld.blogspot.com/2014/12/forever-your-little-loser.html

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  2. Love the stars and supernova as the metaphor.. But I think if we never dare we will always be the losers.

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  3. Heaven sent love is the bestest love...hold onto it and soar to the clouds :)

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  4. Eternity is good for us all--and it was good for me to read this delightful tribute to the collisions caused by love!

    A Tiny Whirlwind

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  5. That trepidation of saying I love you the first time...putting it all out there wondering will it come crashing down...love the planets colliding as that is how it feels isn't it!

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  7. i am not sure but i had the picture of annie lenox singing "no more i love yous" in the first stanza. :-)

    love conquers all - be it on earth or on heaven's above

    PS

    deleted my previous reply as i missed the word "sure"

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  8. Love is persistent, isn't it? And sometimes we just have to follow where the angels lead!! Smiles.

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  9. Very sweet and romantic poem, smiles ~

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  10. For an old egg you still have the "spark" :-)
    ZQ

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  11. The first step is necessarily bold and feels very risky but it is also often rewarding.

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  13. love the romance stirred in an inter galactic whirl

    Mine is here:
    http://myblog-verses.blogspot.com/2014/12/wordle-191.html



    much love

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  14. "A stunning supernova".....very cool write! "Our planets collide." So apt.

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  15. You did a wonderful job of weaving together the ideas of celestial bodies into clerical ideals and love. I like this because you ended up with a poem that touches base on multiple different concepts. It is very important in poetry to allow the reader to unravel their own idea of what the poem is about, and you left this poem open enough to allow that.

    Personally, I thought the poem was about someone appreciating the universe that we live in.

    Keep up the good work! :)

    P.S.
    Don't forget to check out my latest poem at my blog: http://kmercpoetry.blogspot.com/2014/12/twelve-days-of-christmas-1-partridge.html

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  16. You made these words dance and I love the photo...

    Elizabeth

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  17. Well expressed it does feel like that.

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  18. We all -supernova stars, and how important to see it every day it in the eyes of our closer ones...good reminders. Thank you, Robin.

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  19. Sometimes love makes you feel that way.

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  20. This is fun and light and very well done...excellent.

    http://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.ca/2014/12/come-they-close.html

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  21. I found your poem to be filled with romance and love in another sphere..spinning out of control..that is often what love does, it makes our world spin. I enjoyed the whole concept of connecting with the universe.

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  22. felt the uncertainty and the eventual recognition of true love.

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  23. Love comes with uncertainty. But the determination makes it worthy...
    Brilliant :)

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