Whispers in my heart
Love letters from you to me
With many kisses
Remembering you
I so want to breathe you in
Lay my head on you
I miss you so much
You have gone so far away
Out of my reach
The fir trees whisper
They know that I pine for you
How can I catch up?
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Such a yearning for the loved one, very touching.
ReplyDeletethe image of the fir tree and the speaker pining makes the yearning so very poignant....
ReplyDeleteHow many firs dies for your love letters?
ReplyDeleteI feel the sad longing here. The missing is palpable. Powerful!
ReplyDeleteI like that you have used a series of haiku for this love poem. I feel how you miss her, old egg.
ReplyDeletelike the pine longing for the sky...or the rain.lovely.
ReplyDeletepine for you...smiles...nice play on the trees...
ReplyDeleteand its hard when you know they are out of reach
but the feelings are still so strong...
Feeling that feeling, giving it to us--such a fine pure image--you are already among the trees. Stay here awhile.
ReplyDeleteOh, how I know that feeling! We could likely get our Master's in Longing..........this is beautifully written, and deeply felt.
ReplyDeleteI can feel you heart in this sad, sensitive, loving poem.
ReplyDeleteI specially like the last one, very emotional response ~
ReplyDeleteGrace
touching...
ReplyDeleteWhen you even hear the song of the fir-tree -- the loss goes deep..
ReplyDeletethe longing is palpable in this...it is tough to deal with the feelings when the loved one is so far out of reach
ReplyDeleteThe yearning is so deep and heart-felt...beautifully penned... :-)
ReplyDeleteLove the last stanza, a great double meaning.
ReplyDeletethe sadness is plausible..
ReplyDeleteAwww, this is so beautifully sad. And very good :)
ReplyDeleteLovely. Interesting question at the end; makes me wonder if the piece is about growth or longing.
ReplyDeleteIt is longing of course Archna, invoked by the scent of the pines. But you guessed that didn't you? My wife and I were bird watchers and often found ourselves totally alone in forests and the pine scent recalls that.
DeleteThis is a heavy poem yet it feels light to read it. It's the kind that evokes more emotion as it sinks in. Well done.
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