Wednesday, October 8, 2014

Our magic land



You and I found a magic land
So we went there hand in hand
Where soft hills we did explore
Limpid pools enticed us even more

Supple trees swayed from side to side
A dark forest welcomed us inside
Where woodland scents aroused us there
We frolicked in secret without a care

Sun’s arrogant glare now was hidden
Quiet whispers were not forbidden
Life’s crude ways were left far behind
And its torments were out of mind

Oh what magic was there that day
We just didn’t want to come away
When I stole that last kiss from you
You said “Don’t tell a soul, that’s taboo"

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26 comments:

  1. Sweet exploring, indeed. I love the swaying and scents.

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  2. I really like the sentiments here....this kind of discovery remains in one's heart forever.

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  3. It sounds like a beautiful day of discovery, back then - and again, today, in reliving it in memory. Lovely.

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  4. Awwww. so cute. But really, but a stolen kiss that is taboo? Very sentimental poem.

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  5. Very sweet and romantic response ~ I admire the rhyming verses ~

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  6. Something so sweet should never be taboo.

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  7. aah...what a beautiful piece, draws a line straight to the heart...!! :)

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  8. exploration in a magic land is full of sweetness...a lovely rhythm too :)

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  9. I always love a chance to escape into nature. We modern humans don't do enough of it. We might be more sane otherwise.

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  10. "Waiter! A cold shower to Mr Newbery's table!"

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  11. Personification of the sun reminds one of John Donne's 'unruly sun'-discovery of romantic beauty of nature

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  12. That was very sweet, and easy to visualise too.

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  13. Magic is even more magical when stolen and shared

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  14. What an exploration, it sounds quite enjoyable. I really like the poem.

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  15. So sweet, I can feel the lovely innocence of first love. I enjoyed your poem very much!

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  16. So much to be shared together with a loved one. All the more swell when young people are involved! Wonderful write oldegg!

    Hank

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  17. Hi, really pretty and I love the invitations to walk in the woods hand in hand with my sweet husband and enjoy the scenery. I wish I had the ability to rhyme and create rhythym. Can't even spell these days. You are a very talented poet. ;)

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  18. Now that is an excursion that many of us long for. The woods are a special place to get lost...

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  19. Lovely.
    I like how your poem tells a lot of feeling

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  20. I love the enchanted, dark forest. I hope that your secret was sealed!

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