Saturday, October 4, 2014

An Empty Bed



Have I been dreaming?
I woke to an empty bed
Now it seems so big

I reach out, you’ve gone
I hear the rain dance for me
Somebody loves me

Skies are grey today
Everybody’s in a rush
But I’m a slowcoach

The world’s had a wash
There is no trace of you left
Except in my heart

Have I been dreaming?
I woke to an empty bed
Now the world’s so big

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24 comments:

  1. that feeling is so familiar to me... but it's nice to wake up in a cozy bed when the rain is falling and everyone else is in a hurry.

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  2. not too bad to be a slowcoach and enjoy unhurried life but emptiness hurts..... nice lines :)

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  3. Terrific feeling to this one and the repetitive lines and form are delicious :)

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  4. You suffered from daylight savings too, it seams :-)

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  5. oh that is sad... and makes you feel the rain even more...

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  6. pangs of separation are indeed difficult to stomach.

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  7. Sad. Hard to sleep alone when you have spent most of your life sharing a bed with another. I suppose it is part of life...and a painful part.
    Sorry I deleted your comment on my blog in error...tsk ...and it was a nice one too ! Thanks anyway.

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  8. Such dreams bring lost forgotten memories back :(

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  9. This is very poignant, a poem that makes the reader feel. I think both the bed and the world feels so big when missing one who is gone.

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  10. So sad in the ending ~ I specially like the rain dance ~

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  11. One can feel lost in that bed of dreams..but, the sound of rain can be calming..

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  12. The emptiness of a bed that was not always so can be very acute. You have conveyed this well. I like how slightly the last stanza changes from the first, adding more poignancy to your words.

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  13. Tears. You touched my heart. I too am a slow coach enjoying the dance of the rain.

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  14. How we feel the space when someone close moving, leaving....it feels as a drama...Love the rain as fulfilling the emptiness...

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  15. Amazing how the world seems big and desolate in loneliness.. Maybe stay a little longer in those dreams is what's needed.

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  16. This is very moving - the bed, the world, so big, with the loved one gone.

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  17. Enjoyed the whole poem, and the second to last stanza was breathtaking.

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  18. aw, there's so much feeling embedded into these words. i know, all to well, how the world seems when it's too big, how hollow a bed is alone.

    stacy lynn mar
    http://warningthestars.blogspot.com/2014/10/saturday-prompt-2-starry-skies-and.html

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  19. I like this. Very sentimental thoughts. The world is big when we've been left behind. Good poem!

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  20. such despair having to wake up to loneliness. i love it!

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  21. Loneliness can be so painful...that last line really captures that.

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