It was a magic place
Where words were few
And creatures ran free
Where plants thrived
And natures passions
Bloomed in the forest
Without the hang of fear
Here love swarmed free
And sweet nectar kisses
Touched without guile
Joyous jumping young
The sweet hum of bees
All existed in this place
While love ruled long
But man came storming in
So paradise was lost
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Just gorgeous.
ReplyDeleteYou'd think we'd learn but we keep doing it. :-(
ReplyDeleteThis has a wonderful carefree flow...drawing us up short in the end line..like a deer in the headlights...
ReplyDeleteDefinitive piece on paradise lost for sure. The words seem to lead us to the same direction this week.
ReplyDeleteThe past tense "was" in the very first line presages the tragic end of the story.
ReplyDeleteI love the stark common-sense explanation inherent in "so paradise was lost" emphasizing in its apparent simplicity the enormity of the problem
ReplyDeleteParadise lost is true…it is a flaw in our species….
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely, OE. The ending contains sad truth, but until we arrive, all is beautiful.
ReplyDeleteWe just in awe..and dreaming again about the paradise :)
ReplyDeleteGood write.
ReplyDeleteNo matter how long ago paradise was lost, we still continue to dream of finding it again,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
nice work with difficult words. Good flow and imagery.
ReplyDeleteRandy
"man came storming in" really addresses some of the disruption in our world of so much beauty.
ReplyDeletewe do tend to make a mess of things
ReplyDeleteSadly that's what happens. That man calls it progress- I call it destruction.
ReplyDeleteHumans can ruin the nicest of things, can't they, Old Egg. Beautiful and concise piece of writing.
ReplyDeletePamela
Paradise lost, I like your version. it's much more succint than Miltons. Beautifully said. Thank you
ReplyDeleteWow-good, I especially loved the line "without the hang of fear".
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