All storms must pass..in all senses..crisp words..striking..
A loss in her eyes! The resolve on our own is of utmost importance as a back-up. Great write oldegg!Hank
excellent writing. So clear
More often than not, 'bit of an error', there is guilt enough for eveyone, for who has not stumbled?
Perhaps there will be a rainbow after the storm?
Quite the break up, huh?
Break ups can be like that … so much anger. So much passion. Well done!
Can't say why, but I noticed that the middle line of each verse would make a lovely poem...a four line poem. Well wordled, oldegg. I'm enjoying the idea of a poem hidden inside your poem. :)
Bit of an error... indeed!
Acknowledging guilt...so hard for some to do. I love your last line!
The sky imagery works.
I agree with Sabra, there is another poem inside of this one. I like the crispness of the speaker's voice, it suits the content and captures the emotions of the moment.Elizabeth
All good things must come to an end? The lightning imagery implies a certain randomness, in spite of the speaker's professed sense of guilt. Hm.
Cycles, life cycles. Hold fast and wait.
Oh the cycles of life that bind us together. Well penned, Old Egg. Thanks for your kind words on my blog.Pamela
Sad. The recognition that she expected better...
quite an enlighenment by you. I hope all is better now.
You wordled those words into a good story - I hope not autobiographical!
Nice wordling - a graphic tale.
oh yeah, love the stormy weather in our words and emotions....... as if this was just a prelude to the real story coming....