Aw. This is so sweet and sour. I liked the breath bit... with the match, and how you repeated the word match in a different context.. very good. :)
Poignant, nicely wordled :)
I like the flow of this...it almost makes it not so sad
What could have been so bad if someone would dance in the rain with you and sit cosy by the fire eating marshmallows? I hope there is a second chance down the road!
I like the "little you, lanky me" line but am curious about what she found out,Elizabeth
My goodness. Another romance gone bad. Too bad. Your a good poet.
Your idea of fun and your use of words all are so fantastic, I can't imagine there's anything bad to find out about you!
I really like the last few lines - a powerful ending.
Such pain and sadness you have shared here. I hope it was not you.
'found you out' leaves one to wonder what caused the rift...Though sometimes faults can be fabricated. Emotions are dark when there is a split...Thank you for visiting my Story Whirl. :) ~Jules
It has such beautiful flow...Here is my Sunday Swirl post: bridging the past with the future
I agree this is poignant, Old Egg. It does flow beautifully. So sorry for the late visit.Pamela