Monday 9 December 2019

Two views


One view

The troops are here back in our land
Don't they know they'll die on our sand?

It's our bad luck we live in a barren land
It's dry, we're poor, what don't they understand?

And the reverse

Can't they see we want to set them free?
You'd think they'd all be shouting with glee

Don't they realize we live a better life?
Yet theirs is full of oppression and strife




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11 comments:

  1. This is gorgeously rendered, Robin! I love the shift in perpective and how the Landay form shines in this poem 😊 thank you so much for writing to the prompt 💜💜

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  2. I love how you have carried the theme through

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  3. Wonderfully done, Robin. The reversal is cool.

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  4. Well done, Robin; you’ve not only written a series of Landai, you’ve also made them rhyme and you've incorporated a reversal!

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  5. This is wonderful. I love the reversal.

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  6. This form works well in your narrative style.

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  7. Very interesting two perspectives each feels right

    Happy Tuesday

    Much✏love

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  8. Nice, nice. You took this to a far away place, and it works.

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  9. I wonder if the two will ever understand each other

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  10. Goodness you managed to write the form and rhyme. Wonderfully done!

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  11. Even the Jedi pontificate in "points of view". I like the balance of what you've done here, with two earnest perspectives lacking only in their abilities to listen to each other.

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