Friday, 29 November 2019

That girl



I really loved that girl
Was that the truth? Her eyes agreed

 That girl I really loved
Her eyes agreed that was the truth

 I loved that girl? Really?
The eyes agreed; was that her truth?

 The truth was I really loved that girl
That; her eyes agreed

 That agreed, I loved her eyes
That girl really was the truth

 That girl, her eyes I really loved
Agreed that was the truth

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13 comments:

  1. ✿29 November 2019 at 16:08

    I like this piece very much.

    This line gave me chills:
    “That girl really was the truth”

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    1. Magaly Guerrero30 November 2019 at 13:30

      I completely agree. That line is just delicious.

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  2. Sherry Blue Sky29 November 2019 at 16:30

    This was a sweet read, Robin.

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  3. Rosemary Nissen-Wade29 November 2019 at 18:25

    Yes, really – any way you say it.

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  4. Helen29 November 2019 at 21:18

    Love the positive affirmation in this ... love.

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  5. Nithya Venkat30 November 2019 at 00:56

    Two basic lines involving few words-so much said, beautifully written.

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  6. Kerry O'Connor30 November 2019 at 01:13

    This is well done! You told a story with the progression of stanzas.

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  7. Kim M. Russell30 November 2019 at 02:36

    You’ve really grooved with this one, Robin! Such a sweet love poem in every permutation and you’ve made great use of punctuation, which is, I think, the trick behind the form.

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  8. Marian30 November 2019 at 07:18

    Truth! Truth.

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  9. Sanaa Rizvi30 November 2019 at 10:40

    This is incredibly gorgeous, Robin!❤️ I love the progression throughout the poem.

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  10. Jim30 November 2019 at 11:03

    Very clever, Robin. The ayes (eyes) have it.
    Cheers
    ..

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  11. brudberg30 November 2019 at 12:54

    From questions to confirmation... Love it

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  12. Magaly Guerrero30 November 2019 at 13:31

    Yes, she was. And the speaker did. And love looks wonderful on them, that was the truth.

    I so love what you do with love and relationships, Robin.

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