Sunday, April 13, 2014

The china doll




Briefly an affair
Her skin was like porcelain
My fine china doll

I loved her deep voice
The prayers she chanted sadly
Her wrists as they turned

Me, hooked once again
We would meet in the moonlight
And I swore true love

She loved gaudy things
But her family wanted papers
That I provided

Now left in limbo
Tumbling in oblivion
They’re free, but not me

For I remember
Her skin was like porcelain
My fine china doll



16 comments:

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    1. good word, wistful: fits Egg's poem perfectly.

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  2. The repetition was strong as fired clay..very effective..i guess reality tarnishes any fine porcelain..

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  3. Wishful yes but still a dream that can well be pursued! Wonderful write oldegg!

    Hank

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  4. almost like a remembrance of something that was more doll-like than real

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  5. I'm pretty sure you made it all up. :)

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  6. Love it! You made this look simple but those haiku style stanzas are difficult to write to order. Well done!

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  7. Romantic and yet grittily modern. Interesting combo and great poem.

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  8. Lovely haiku string. It definitely evokes a romantic image and the photo completes it.

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  9. Oh, Oh, Oh, This is just exquisite - love each the delicacy of the entire work:)

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  10. Another detailed snapshot of love misplaced or misjudged. We humans do awful things to one another to get what we want.

    Elizabeth

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  11. I have to ditto, Elizabeth's comment on this poem, Old Egg. Beautifully penned. Look at me! I am actually out-of-my-shell, commenting on Sunday. Thanks for reading my ramblings and supporting me. It is much appreciated.

    Pamela

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  12. I can see the girl, I can feel the sadness...More of it - the haiku style, rhythm easily play together with melody, the song I just sung with every third line as refrain....nice

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  13. Lovely work, OE. repetition works beautifully here.

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  14. Gorgeously written! Painting beautiful and sad pictures... *smile*

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