The fading star
That penitent look
Won’t work anymore my dear
Don’t try to make up
I want to believe
That you loved me all along
My true shining star
It is a tribute
To your skill that you
fooled me
For such a long time
That penitent look
Is such a tribute to you
I wanted to believe
Excellent!
ReplyDeleteBeth
Don't believe a word of it.You would be a hard one to fool. Should I be penitent for these provocative utterances?This comment is a tribute to your intelligence:)
ReplyDeleteI have to believe that those too-clever types never truly find happiness.
ReplyDeleteMy, how I know that feeling. I was tricked by too many of those too-clever types. I almost let one of them trick me twice, but that would have made me double the fool.
ReplyDeleteKnow it face it! good one...
ReplyDeletei like the repetition and the rhythm in this, very clever. And I don't think you'd be taken in ;)
ReplyDeleteEnough is quite sufficient. Forget her, and go buy a beer.
ReplyDeleteAww... I've felt that way and it's no fun.
ReplyDeleteAwesome write.
ReplyDeleteVery well said. That penitent look can be such a sham.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully composed, you have said and conveyed so much in so few lines, beautifully done
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This is beautiful !!!
ReplyDeleteRobin, once again your poetry amazes. As talented a storyteller as you are, I think this affects your poetry... the characters are vivid and the emotions are raw at times. This one, with that repeat in the final stanza, BRILL! Amy
ReplyDeleteI agree with Amy your poetry is solid as a heart of stone..though your heart is anything but..
ReplyDeleteHow sad that you can't trust them.
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