Wednesday, May 1, 2013

The fading star



That penitent look

Won’t work anymore my dear

Don’t try to make up

 

I want to believe

That you loved me all along

My true shining star

 

It is a tribute

To your skill that you fooled me

For such a long time

 

That penitent look

Is such a tribute to you

I wanted to believe

15 comments:

  1. Don't believe a word of it.You would be a hard one to fool. Should I be penitent for these provocative utterances?This comment is a tribute to your intelligence:)

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  2. I have to believe that those too-clever types never truly find happiness.

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  3. My, how I know that feeling. I was tricked by too many of those too-clever types. I almost let one of them trick me twice, but that would have made me double the fool.

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  4. Know it face it! good one...

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  5. i like the repetition and the rhythm in this, very clever. And I don't think you'd be taken in ;)

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  6. Enough is quite sufficient. Forget her, and go buy a beer.

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  7. Aww... I've felt that way and it's no fun.

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  8. Very well said. That penitent look can be such a sham.

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  9. Beautifully composed, you have said and conveyed so much in so few lines, beautifully done

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  10. Robin, once again your poetry amazes. As talented a storyteller as you are, I think this affects your poetry... the characters are vivid and the emotions are raw at times. This one, with that repeat in the final stanza, BRILL! Amy

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  11. I agree with Amy your poetry is solid as a heart of stone..though your heart is anything but..

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  12. How sad that you can't trust them.

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