A lovely haiku sequenceJoy fills the bubblesBlown from soapy laughter ofWash day frivalryMuch love
it takes some time, but the turn does happen
A lovely description of a moment we all experience.Okay, maybe sociopaths don't experience it, but all the rest of us...
Lost in reverie!! Contemplating and dreaming is life's unending stream and the awakening to positive thoughts in the end silences the sadness away!! Cheers!!
I enjoyed the visual of the laundry drying on the line, Old Egg. Nicely written.Pamela
very nice. I hope there are happier days ahead for them.
O fly inky doubts.... most definitely! I love the hope at the end of this piece, OE. Nicely done.
A very deeply felt poem. Lovely.
Quite gorgeous. I can see this day and feel the pain.
Laundry day for you too, I see! I like the speaker's determination at the end: "I will live again." Amen!
Like the drying clothes, we are pinned to our journey. Like the uplift at the end.Elizabeth
Oh I love poems about mundane things like the laundry... poems that are also about something else! And the first three lines(especially) stand alone as a haiku! :)
The progression of this poem from beginning to middle to end is a lovely read. Write on!
Lovely flow of words and images.
Love your haiku style poem, wise use of words, like the visual of 'My mind is scarlet with pain', and happy with your last stanza/haiku, sounded with hope. Great!
I love the use of laundry, of shirts and then the image of holes where arrow have pierced him. Good one!
Burn baby, burn! This piece smouldered with incendiary heat, oldegg! Thanks for sharing it.
Broken heart hung with the washing. Both taking a beating from the sun. And yet there is always hope. Thank you for your visit to my wordle story verse. I guess I find it east to use the words. I let the list direct were the story goes. ~Jules
That was supposed to be easy not 'east' but my fingers tripped. :)
Really enjoyed this, especially the turn at the end.