pale languid lies a mess of contradiction...sounds like good riddance!
"Those pale languid lies...." I love this stanza. There is much to read into it.
Will the speaker be sad that there is no trace of him/her in the other's heart? I think not...
Grea t images, OE! I love:"forest of your mind"and "pale languid lies."So good!
This is a sad poem, especially the last verse. Your speaker seems so resigned at the end. I especially liked the first verse and the forest of your mind!Wherein The Muse's Vehicle Goes Into the Shop For Repairs
The complexity of the human mind and human nature!! It is a network of intricate linkages and breaks!!
This describes my relationships with every man before my current husband. I got it right this time!
This is a great combination of what we want & what is here! Very nice images.
Some great alliteration in this piece. A very enjoyable read.
Think you have captured a reality for many with these words. Especially like the final stanza which brings up many questions and keeps the reader guessing,Elizabethhttp://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/06/23/lost/
i'm just reading today; good write; haven't done mine yet; maybe within the next 2 days; have a nice Sundaymuch love...
A great piece. I especially love the unexpected "file me away" after "balloon," (as opposed to "fly.")
So fill my balloonWith your gas of desireAnd file me awayDays of desire to keep buoyant.
To be so close but leave no trace seems strange, but it happens. One can only assume that this is confirmation that it was never meant to be.
Some very nice word phrasing here, old egg. Best to forget a person like that though.Pamela
Great imagery and great poetic language! Seems a lot are not going in a good way. Nicely Oldegg!Hank
Very good. I like it. It reminds me of someone, but I can't seem to find a trace of him in my mind...
You always write the most beautiful poems . Always enjoy reading them too.
This is wonderful. Those first two stanzas had some wonderful imagery in them.