Wednesday, September 19, 2012

Walking alone

It's my fall from grace
Absolute misery now
I've been shown the door

So I walk alone
Not to nestle in your arms
Tears like autumn leaves

17 comments:

  1. I know we commenters are often very effusive in our praises, but I gotta tell you - I think this is the most beautifully moving and sensitive haiku ever!

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  2. There was something about those 3 words, maybe because it's fall in my hemisphere, that reminded me of leaves and trees and lost love.

    Beautiful poem. You are a talented writer.

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  3. I love that tear like autumn leaves.

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  4. Such a lot can be felt from so little words.

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  5. So short and yet so evocative. Everything is finite. Everything changes.

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  6. Sensitive, and sentimental. But NOT sentimental 'twee', sentimental heartfelt.

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  7. Fine, fine work here--very moving, beautifully sad. The closing simile is absolutely perfect.

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  8. The poem conveys its sadness very well. "Tears like autumn leaves" is a wonderful line, especially for this time of year!

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  9. Cold..lonely..harsh..words like a bare tree..( in a beautiful way) Jae

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  10. And a cold winter approaches, I fear.

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  11. How very sad. In the end it feels as inevitable as our seasons.

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  12. Was never good at writing haikus or senryus for that matter ...but this one made me pause and think and sent an "autumny" lump down my throat :)

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  13. This piece is so touching and sad! I can't believe you've fallen from grace. It seems impossible given your sensitivity.

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  14. Shown the door'......Not original, but in the concept of this poem it has a real ring of finality.

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  15. We always miss what we do not have, and mourn what we've lost. Odd, if we've not had it, how do we know we should miss it?

    I like this one, yes.
    Thank you.

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