On a scale of one
to ten it was a three
Mornings are like
that
My hearing was
fine
I could hear the
chimes of the town clock
But my sight was
impaired by alcohol
Not that I wanted
to look at anything
But work called
I whimpered with
regret
The bed looked
comfortable resting there
My toes curled on
the cold floor
Oh, I can see!
It was a misty
day
It was a misty me
with misty eyes
Scattered
clothes, unfriendly mirror, tattered face
It was a raw day
It was a raw me
with a raw tongue
My edges were
frayed.
Flinging death
aside I showered and wished to drown
I didn’t, so my
score clicked up to five
Damp me, dump
clothes, fresh togs, drink juice
I”ve played this
game before
Juice, juice,
juice the colour of the sun
Which curves its
way up into the sky
for me and
everyone else
Why doesn’t it
have day off?
I am a man of
straw, a man on the edge
Out of the house,
skirting the dog do
The world is
vast, too big, too small
My pretty
neighbour is at the bus stop
I’ll ask her for
a drink tonight. She smiles.
I feel so good.
In some ways I could relate to the typical Monday morning blues as portrayed here. I don't do the drinking anymore, but dragging myself out of bed is just the same. A shower get the blood moving, a bit of caffeine gets me going, and isn't it funny how a friendly smile to start the day can make all the difference?! Great poem, Old Egg!
ReplyDeleteMaybe it's a good thing reality called!
ReplyDeleteI don't know about that invitation at the end, Old Egg. A story well told.
ReplyDeletePamela
Robin - good to see you at The Whirl. Is it your first go there, or have I missed your previous visits? In any case, this was a well-told story in which those wordle words were nicely absorbed.
ReplyDeleteVery creative as always.
ReplyDeleteYou never know what's going to make your morning, or your day. I guess that's as good a reason as any to get out of bed and make the effort!
ReplyDeleteSome days just keep getting better!
ReplyDeleteFantastic. I like the periodic repetition . . .it felt like waking up and working through a great hangover - only to probably do the whole thing again. Clever! Comical and sad.
ReplyDeleteThis is a lovely story ... well done !!!
ReplyDeleteWay to wordle..juice must be good where you are..unless its grapefruit it's not sharp enough to change the course of a morning here :)
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this. I like the repetition. Good job using the wordle words. Thanks for visiting me.
ReplyDeleteThis is kind of Shakespearean the way the whole world reflects the narrator's mood from "Misty me with misty eyes" to "My edges were frayed".
ReplyDeletereminds me of my days in the service...not sure I wanted to go there...oh-oh I can feel a head ache coming on.
ReplyDeleteLove the idea of the bed resting there. I'm so glad I am retired from all office work. This poem has wonderful rhythm.
ReplyDeleteOh, I think I had a morning like that once or twice. :) Frayed is surely descriptive.
ReplyDeleteNice piece!